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No Plagiarism!bjesQMwwSKy7o6FLfWiIposted on PENANA 一定新版!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!8964 copyright protection389PENANAeQDZapPA6b 維尼
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1)請問你閲讀至第一部的哪一章?8964 copyright protection389PENANAnKtKUBMnCT 維尼
上次寫完書評後還有繼續看喔,從75章上,一直看到250章下,然後今天又補了除付費以外的全部章節(269下)8964 copyright protection389PENANAr54KuJFIcC 維尼
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(我不是在考試嗎?怎麼都在看書?都怪黑正的半蟲戰機太好看)8964 copyright protection389PENANAo2d6SHTIVY 維尼
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(另外說一聲抱歉,我是真的窮,沒錢買付費章節QQ(我真的很需要錢錢OuO8964 copyright protection389PENANAZGSZxMPnyv 維尼
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2)請問你最喜歡哪些角色?8964 copyright protection389PENANAivWmrBjCeD 維尼
看了新版的第一章後,從睦斂威轉到了默守晨,有種受轉攻的感覺OuO8964 copyright protection389PENANAqDRkVzkQph 維尼
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還有依舊沒變的楊旭娜,這次我就直說了,蘿莉Saikou!!!8964 copyright protection389PENANA6no0JqbaXX 維尼
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(沒討厭的角色,第三題就不答了)8964 copyright protection389PENANANXQvEv4run 維尼
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5)請問你最想凑合哪一對CP?(可以發揮創意,拆散CP,甚至男男或女女)8964 copyright protection389PENANAxkdb4yblpo 維尼
還是和上次一樣,睦斂威跟默守晨!8964 copyright protection389PENANAzvJbqhr5o0 維尼
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看了新版的第一章後我已經想像得出他們愛愛的情節了!麻煩這些情節在我的腦中待久一點393Please respect copyright.PENANA5j3ys8miRE
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(欸不是我今天要考數學)8964 copyright protection389PENANArcR2DjZZKb 維尼
(好了,考完了,炒了,他們愛愛的臆想還在我的腦中揮之不去OuO)8964 copyright protection389PENANA2PBhXj1mHk 維尼
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6)請問你最喜歡哪一場戰鬥?8964 copyright protection389PENANAdlCFDaVM5R 維尼
就是開頭那一場,太刺激了,建議再來一張床(?8964 copyright protection389PENANAynDIxyCV6n 維尼
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8)請問這部作品的哪些優點最吸引?8964 copyright protection389PENANAnhmC7LPz6i 維尼
角色之間的互動都好好看!感覺比戰鬥場面還要好看。8964 copyright protection389PENANAVwUDEKr9t1 維尼
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9)請問這部作品的哪一點還可以再改進?8964 copyright protection389PENANAPE7v04WR6w 維尼
(請別浪費時間寫出目前已知的缺點,阁下的时间非常宝贵。)8964 copyright protection389PENANAM4frelONjs 維尼
已知缺點:劇情混亂、對白太多、初期角色太多、節奏緩慢沉悶、標點符號問題、台詞中二、主角不突出、篇幅太長、文筆配不上插圖、描寫太細緻、戰記卻沒有大場面的戰爭、與想像的蟲人不符合、不喜歡故事題材。8964 copyright protection389PENANAjmXd3ROuSf 維尼
沒有睦斂威跟默守晨的BL情節(差評(建議出同人,改名半床戰記8964 copyright protection389PENANACP2MYHiMSO 維尼
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至於我投新版的原因都很明顯了吧(那就不多說了(先去流鼻血了8964 copyright protection389PENANAEfTUZXUPae 維尼
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