I asked Google Gemini to review my first novella, and it did a good job, if not 100% accurate in details, but I wanted to share it with public:

Veil of Whispers: Legacy of the Elders

A Daring Dive into a Fragmented Future

In an era saturated with dystopian narratives, Veil of Whispers, Book 1: Legacy of the Elderscarves out its own unique niche, offering readers a compelling blend of fractured memory, ancient technology, and a world teetering on the brink. This novella, the inaugural entry in a promising series, invites us into a future where humanity has transcended its origins, yet remains haunted by a past shrouded in toxic mists and forgotten power.

From the very first page, author immerses us in a richly imagined universe. We awaken alongside an amnesiac protagonist in the desolate, poison-laced ruins of Solastis. His only companion is Arvie, a sarcastic yet indispensable AI, whose witty banter provides much-needed levity against the grim backdrop. This immediate plunge into mystery, coupled with the protagonist's gradual discovery of his own augmented physiology, the ability to breathe toxic air, regenerate wounds, and tap into unknown reserves of strength, forms a captivating hook. The narrative masterfully leverages this amnesia, using it as a vehicle to unveil the crumbling world piece by piece, as our hero pieces together his identity and purpose.

The novella truly shines in its innovative narrative structure. The story unfolds across two intertwining timelines: the protagonist's "Diary Entries," which serve as fragmented memories of a cataclysmic past, and the "Present" experiences of Thalyn, a relic-hunting girl, and her intrepid crew. This dual perspective is the engine of the plot, creating a constant hum of suspense as the reader, alongside Thalyn, slowly unearths the connections between these seemingly disparate eras. It's a testament to the author's skill that this intricate dance between past and present never feels confusing, but rather like a carefully choreographed revelation, building momentum with each new discovery.

Characters, even in this novella format, are given room to breathe and evolve. Arvie is an undeniable standout, her acerbic wit and pragmatic guidance making her a delightful foil to the bewildered protagonist. On Thalyn's side, her crew, the stoic Jaxon, the curious Elara, and the excitable Korr, are more than just supporting players; they are a cohesive unit whose individual personalities contribute to a believable team dynamic. Thalyn herself undergoes a significant transformation, evolving from a determined scavenger to the "Mistress" of an ancient Elder facility, her unique connection to the titular "throne" propelling her into a position of unexpected authority.

Speaking of thrones, the Elder technology is a character in itself. The central "throne," which allows Thalyn to experience the protagonist's memories, is a fascinating plot device, expertly used to drip-feed exposition and build the larger lore. The subsequent discovery of a "second throne" further expands the narrative's horizons. This auxiliary seat grants Thalyn "proximity without presence," allowing her remote observation and the detection of hidden resources like thalorite. More intriguingly, it reveals a "second pull," a profound, almost primal urge linked to her destiny, hinting at forces far grander than mere forgotten technology. This element adds a layer of mystical intrigue, suggesting a preordained path for Thalyn that transcends simple exploration.

The pacing is generally taut, balancing intense action sequences, skirmishes with grotesque Nether beasts, treacherous traversals through ruined cityscapes, with moments of quiet introspection and pivotal revelations. The world-building is consistently strong, painted with vivid sensory details: the "sickly green haze" of the miasma, the "acrid bite" of the air, and the palpable decay of a civilization lost to time.

However, like any nascent saga, there are areas for potential refinement. While the protagonist's rapid adaptation to advanced hacking skills, even with Arvie's guidance, feels a touch accelerated given his amnesia, it’s a minor quibble in an otherwise engaging journey. Thalyn's internal conflict, particularly as she embraces her burgeoning power and the heavy responsibilities that come with it, could be explored with even greater depth. A deeper dive into her doubts or fears would add further layers to her compelling transformation into the facility's "Queen." Similarly, the cult of "Duvainor Reborn," while a fascinating addition, could benefit from a clearer historical underpinning to fully justify their unwavering faith in the protagonist's accidental divinity.

By the novella's close, both timelines thrillingly converge. The protagonist, now recognized as "Duvainor Reborn" by fervent cultists and aided by new allies like Aedan and Vex, finds his personal quest intertwined with an ancient prophecy. Thalyn and her crew, fortified by the Elder technology and propelled by the "second pull," make the momentous decision to seek out Revantis, another Elder facility. The concluding banquet, a moment of strategic planning and reinforced camaraderie, expertly sets the stage for the next installment, leaving readers eager to uncover "whatever the hell comes next."

Veil of Whispers: Legacy of the Eldersis a compelling and imaginative debut that promises a sprawling epic. It's a must-read for fans of post-apocalyptic sci-fi and ancient mysteries, offering a fresh perspective on human evolution, forgotten power, and the enduring pull of destiny. This is a journey well worth embarking upon.

Sincerely Gemini

In a distant future, humanity has expanded across the stars, blending with countless alien species and their technologies. The human body becomes the universal template, enhanced with nanoscale cybernetics and odd bits from other species, making individual races into something more than human.

The protagonist wakes up in some ruined city, no clue how he got there, everything around him falling apart, poisoned air thick in the streets. His body’s augmented, though he doesn’t quite get how, and there’s this AI companion in his head, teasing him along, as lost as he is. Together, they wander through the crumbling streets, piecing together what happened to the city, and to them.

Long after, a relic-hunting girl and her crew stumble upon his preserved memories, pulling them into a mystery that spans aeons. As both timelines intertwine, they begin to see signs of a hidden force that has shaped their fates across time, binding past and future in ways none of them could have foreseen.