可惜文中太多「我」了，如果可以換寫法會更好。最後一句的處理比較好，不然就只是普通的夢境。對於怪物沒有比較深入描繪，所以感覺不恐怖。繼續加油吧，希望潛水中～生活順利。121Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSm5x2ygjIZ
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