可惜文中太多「我」了，如果可以換寫法會更好。最後一句的處理比較好，不然就只是普通的夢境。對於怪物沒有比較深入描繪，所以感覺不恐怖。繼續加油吧，希望潛水中～生活順利。122Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ8d6Dzqn7vn
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啊！有怪獸！122Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNkFlEoXx32
哪裡？那裡？122Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡIIeXKgpKgQ
這裡有，這裡有，那裡也有～122Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDyR4pCscKZ
就在你你我的時間裡！122Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPjs2XHQaT9
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