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Feb 25, 2023 224 2 Mins Read 500 Words
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林檎大大安安

閱讀範圍到#10

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該敘述就敘述，該演就演，

對白流暢，場景敘述完整。

文筆程度R上SR，加上有圖片輔助👍，

造理說是個可以SSR的作品。

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不過我有一個最大的疑問

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故事什麼時候才會開始呢🧐🧐

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前面比較像在看背景設定集、角色相處的一些小傳。

到#8才有另一個女角(疑似情敵)，有衝突才有那麼一咪的終於故事終於要開始了的感覺。

到#10背下來的有：

世界有龍族、有魔法、晨曦之劍／槍，其中一個是女主角。

好像有貴族VS貴族，晚上不能關燈不然就會死(？)，有邪惡的非人類種族。

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就⋯⋯故事還沒開始，先被作者上了一課的感覺。

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要看的懂我的故事，請先把這些資訊背下來哦😘

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我🥹🥹🥹

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或許是劇情走慢熱路線，我試著用另一種看故事的方法。

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那就是喜歡角色～

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女主角：漂亮學霸，雖然有談戀愛就傻傻的屬性，但還是離我太遠了，先不要。

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庫雷因（老實說我搞錯以為他是男主角）：

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雖然現在油膩油膩的，但純情的女主角一定能感化他，

讓他浪子回頭吧！等等、感覺他要黑化了，那還是先不要好了。

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女主導師：龍族，總之也是個超強強者，一樣離我太遠，先不要。

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男主角：誰？

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情敵：剛出場沒什麼感覺

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身為讀者的我，不知從何下手，劇情(目前)吸引不瞭、角色(目前)還喜歡不上，

沒有很大的動力繼續閱讀下去。

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當然這只是我的個人感想，如一開始所述林檎大大是個實力派作者，

也或許我本身就不屬於林檎大大的"目標讀者"，以上心得就～看看就好。

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最後祝福林檎大大寫作順利。

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