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No Plagiarism!bVzgbu8Xl2PYoP1WGaOUposted on PENANA 一點點不專業小意見~~8964 copyright protection125PENANAxCA2zKsa4b 維尼
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我是邊看邊紀錄的,比起說是書評,應該更像是讀後感想吧?8964 copyright protection125PENANArwCW9iUrjx 維尼
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反正都是類似的東西差不多(?)8964 copyright protection125PENANAdXmFTQHPvp 維尼
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先說,這些都是我個人的意見,你看著參考就好!8964 copyright protection125PENANAClpCmf6YY1 維尼
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第一章8964 copyright protection125PENANAuFzS3EPN5U 維尼
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整個故事走向都沒問題,開頭很穩,直接進入主題蠻不錯的。8964 copyright protection125PENANAMc1pQIDECZ 維尼
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唯一一個讓我比較在意的點就是標點符號。8964 copyright protection125PENANALfVROlpmhi 維尼
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建議每句話後面都要有句號。即使讀者看的時候會自動把標點符號矯正過來,但如果上一句有句號,下一句又突然沒有,這樣排版也很怪、不美觀,對吧?8964 copyright protection125PENANA7eBFy6GvGq 維尼
更不用說,人物在說話的時候,也要有句號了。8964 copyright protection125PENANAenNkrvYnij 維尼
後面這點在第一章更常見。8964 copyright protection125PENANAJEnfnlGsz0 維尼
舉例來說:8964 copyright protection125PENANAGAix7zoVNS 維尼
小明說:「我今天要回家吃飯。」8964 copyright protection125PENANABSI627U1UR 維尼
飯後面加了個句號對吧?代表他說完了這句話。8964 copyright protection125PENANAmIL16mrSq9 維尼
但作者你除了後面是「?」或「!」的時候會加以外,其餘的句子都沒加。8964 copyright protection125PENANARwDnpeYXAs 維尼
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標點符號真的很重要,有蠻多讀者在看到不正確的標點符號時就不會想再繼續看下去了。8964 copyright protection125PENANANPyi25dSpX 維尼
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以及,刪節號是六個點一起。8964 copyright protection125PENANAKI9g6rWRMZ 維尼
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然後我記得繁體中文好像沒有關於「‘’‘’」這個標點符號的用法,你如果要引用,最好還是用「」這個。8964 copyright protection125PENANAcPuLgPNgdu 維尼
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這個點在後面第二章,人物說話時更嚴重。8964 copyright protection125PENANAczkJlp2RAl 維尼
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只有簡體字在人物說話時是用“”。8964 copyright protection125PENANAKAY4L4doB0 維尼
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第二章。8964 copyright protection125PENANAClmvfiUvm8 維尼
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一樣標點符號的問題。8964 copyright protection125PENANAFFW0gen63j 維尼
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有一段我很在意,就是江楓跟鐘鉉把蔣晨拖去廁所打的那段,你描述的是「廁所離教室並不遠,對江楓還有鐘鉉來說是一個打人的好去處。」8964 copyright protection125PENANAS5qa2bQs4a 維尼
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我不知道是不是我的閱讀理解有誤還是什麼8964 copyright protection125PENANAfYME673i6D 維尼
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但在我這裡看來,這段的意思是「廁所跟教室離得近,所以方便打人。」8964 copyright protection125PENANANXKdZI1rEA 維尼
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但通常這種學生之間的打架不應該會去偏僻一點的地方嗎???8964 copyright protection125PENANAFEYY455vVq 維尼
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這只是我疑惑的一個點而已。如果你本來就是這個意思那當我沒說。8964 copyright protection125PENANAEcWecaV0Im 維尼
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因為後面看起來應該都是重複的問題了,我就不多說了。8964 copyright protection125PENANAhF5ZOygFoh 維尼
劇情上沒什麼太大的問題,標點符號的問題比較大。8964 copyright protection125PENANAxwWE010kud 維尼
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